Wow great poem i like the flow it is excellent and the rhyme was wow awesome the repitition of the line
was not bad actually it adds color to this poem and there are just some words i cant understand lols because im not familiar to that but this is great i love it

you use powerful words
great job

Geneross

Wow. Noni this was lovely. Absolutley amazing. I loved the ryhmeing scheme of it. Lovely Write.

Such a sad poem, but I really liked the format you used. The rhymes were great too. Good stuff Noni! Wow, I missed being here. Kind of..

Aww, such a sad poem. Not much I can really add to it...I thought it was really well done. Flow was excellent, and vocab was beyond my belief how you fit it all in with the flow too. Great write. 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

Noni--- This was great! I loved this poem!

Your flow was great. It didn't seem rocky at all to me.

I liked the rhymes too. There's some in there that were different, and that's always good.

I also REALLY liked how you repeated the same stanza at the start and at the finish but by adding another two lines to it at the end.

Great job, hun! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Wow *wide eyed* im sorta get shivers a bit...a 5/5 for me and i think i made a mistake on another poem of urs it was suppose to b 5/5 not 5/55 srry bout tht..

*Kiss* lol, sorry I had to break the tension. Seems like you're really sad, or just on a creative rampage with these sad poems. Awww Noni, this was a really good poem and I liked the rhymes. Kisses can be fun and make people smile!! I hope I made you smile :) Really good poem! I liked it!

Gah! I didn't remember doing this poem. So I'll do another one!

Wow this is awesome!!!
you have so much talent gal..that was more than words could describe =)

I love the idea of the poem..bringing death in your lips....very great point of view.lool!
no seriously your poem was very heartfelt and outstanding!!
I hope you're Okay
thanks for inspiring me -*)
Lov
NemO xxxxxxxxxxx