Awh, this was so sad.. I think you should have explained everything a bit more as it was all a bit hard to understand.. The idea was amazing though, and I am glad you wrote about it.. The flow is pretty good and the emotion was flowing from every line.. Nice job 5/5

I loved this poem! you said it all!!! its soo true! and well write more, i can see you got the talent!

Keep it up!