I love the way you change the entire mood of the poem half way through. only talent can do that :)

Hey,
Thanks for the comment ^_^
Love this poem.I agree w/ Lonelynow
5 stars
keep writeing

I liked it sometimes i just gotta write poems like this...Keep up the good work...:)

Awh, this was great.. The flow was good, the emotion was clear, and the descriptions beautiful.. I loved how you put lots of imagery into a very sad poem. Nicely done 5/5

I like this poem itss a good one of yours, simply because of the imagery. The personification of the water- heartbeat, swallow, spit... was really well done and gave a double meaning to the poem which is easily related to. Great job!!