by Leah20 Aug 17, 2006
category :
Life, society /
other
And it just struck me today how fragile this whole thing is. I could be gone tomorrow, future plans thrown to the wind along with my ashes across the vast expanses. And you really do have to live in the moment and seize all opportunities. Because someday, it may all just disappear. |
Very wise!! maybe break it up into stanza's though it would help it look more professional and like an actual poem! other than that i think it was a very insightful and true poem! The fact of life is that we are given one chance to live it up and make it count. You will make mistakes and shed tears but why live your life in a boring or upset state? enjoy what you can!!! ok im done now lol : ) great job! 5/5 |
Awesome thought.. |
by Letty
I couldn't have said it better myself. You put a large amount of emotion into so little words. I felt each and every word as I read it. This was really wonderful. You are a very talented poet. Keep up the good work. |
Live life day by day and love each and everyday like you will die tomorrow...i like it its all the truth 5/5 always Manda |
This seems more of a very short summary about what life is about... more thatn a poem.. but the thoughtfulness words that were choosen.. is yet so pwerful good job.. 4/5 |