Awh, I liked that.. It was good.. The flow worked well and the descriptions were great! There were a few mistakes with grammer and some site errors but you can fix all that.. Wonderful work! 5/5

Hmmm. . .I like it. . .it reminds me of that NIN song "The Becoming" I think it was. Anyway, good work.

Ok lyrics...maybe a bit cliche in parts. You have a character typo in places at the end of the lyrics.

Beautifully written and powerful message.
5/5

[Tragic]

Andy I really really like this! its...Brilliant! haha. You should read my poems! kk much love!

A little cliche, but awesome. =) really well written. 5/5
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