Hehe, yay! You did it hunny! It's awesome, I love it! The words you chose were very descriptive and were perfect for what you were strying to say.. Wonderful job Taleee, Ilyy! 5/5

Nice I like it :) Check out mine :)

For something so short it had TONS of power, I as I am sure other ppl can also relate to this very much. it's sad but heartfelt. you wrote it beautifully. i'm glad you finally did it =) ilu 5/5

More of how I've been feeling but not showing. I loved this poem, the form, the words, everything.

Hey ive never heard of this kind of poem before, but ive really enjoyed reading this! great job 5/5 love mel

Wow that was one of the best japanese lanturne poems I have ever read.. infact I think its the first! It has a lot of meanign which is surprising for being so short.. good work :D

Wow awsome never heard of Laturne...u made in perfect words....i lik it alot a 5/5 for me..

Wow
5/5
its short but very good.

I like this different style instead of the same old stuff abab rhyming or abcb rhyming

I hope you understand
I thought it was very good espeacially cause its original.
~Emah

Descriptive, emotional, brilliant! That's all I have to say really!