Ooh, wow, lots of big words! Tehee.. Wow, just the words you used left me speechless hunny.. This was so deep and really sad.. The flow was excellent and the emotion was oozing from every word.. Wonderful job, Ily! 5/5

Hey darl a t0uching piece i luv the way u structure ur poems. good job.

I loved loved the last stanza and the last lilne just pulled it all together. I loved your word usage, it was absolutely amazing, but what else do you expect it came from you. =D ilu 5/5

Nat, I really can see you getting better and better with your poetry. Your words are maturing very quickly and I have to say, I am impressed. This was a wonderful piece, very unique. Well done!

Hey nice work on all your poems :) thanks for checking out my lyrics too.. and showing the mistakes haha. :P

Wasn't veyr fond of he flow in this poem. Some of your lines seemed longer than other becase they had to many syllables. But once more, you have blown me away with all you big words. 5/5

Wow! That poem was amazing. You had great word usage and the rhyming kept up well and didn't seem forced at all. I like the way that you asked questions between the stanzas and answered them. It gave the poem a nice effect. You described everything ver well in this and it was all very well thought out and beautifully written. 5/5

Should I show my pain?

No, I can't.

wow you really sucked me in from the very start. This was an amazing poem and I look forward to reading the rest!

Wow awsome poem!! i can relate somehow..keep on writing!!

Spectacular

Its so sad and so....deep
I hope for the best
take care.
~emah 5/5

Wow.. an excellent poem, I loved the way You seperated the stanzas with a question followed by 'I can't' .. amazing piece of poetry.. well done 5/5 xx

Oh Nat this poem was so sad The final line I could relate to so much recently that it's been bothering me a bit. Your sad poems are always so written well.

Great job, very deep lines. Keep it up...and yes, I'm doing okay..

Battling a constant contagious fight.

^ Loved this line.
Nice format and content here.
I didn't like the 3rd stanza, not sure why though. Just felt like something was missing from it.

This another great write!
keep it up

5/5

thanks for the comment on my poem it means alot to me

Awww i really liked this poem . anywayys i Like all your work :D . anyway keep smiling .

Love You,
Zena

Carnage words forsaking emotions,
Immersing dilemmas beyond sight,
Daunted by truth in need of repairing,
Battling a constant contagious fight.

^^That was the best part, I think. The depth was AMAZING! I loved the flow and heart. Great work.

Wow i luved this i luv the use of words it flows so well
keep up the grea work!!! 5/5
p.s thanks for commenting on my poem means alot x x x x x

I love your vocabulary, i wish i could write like this ... another good job <3 sarah