by Jessica Aug 18, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Sparkling tears slowly fall down pale cheeks |
Its a good peom..but somethings not right with the flow of it..its not very natural..but its still good. very sad..whats with you writting about fat people, huh? this better not be about you.! lol. anyways..good poem. but maybe work a little more on the flow of it. |
by Aussie
Gr8 poem. it has alot of emotions. rythme gos nicely. keep writing |
by i love ben!!
Awwh...thats sad...i can relate well though...i went through something like that...i loved it though...5/5!! great job |
by Maddy
That was amazing!! |
by MeganLeigh
I really like this poem. I givve it a 5/5 |