Your right when you say it's not great... but hey I'm not great eather.... I like the way that you do't leave anything out...even in a short poem where things can go wrong...but speak before you act? I think you should have left it at think before you act....but thats just me... 4/5 keep writing, thats the only way to get to the top

I wanna know your story

It's not amazing but it is great every poem that has a meaning is great and i really liked this one. well done