Nice poem, you could improve it by putting it in stanzas and making it rhyme. Nice Job though.

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EXCELLENT i do like your poems very... its nice for me

EXCELLENT i do like your poems very... its nice for me

I agree with the fact that you could put it in stanzas and make it rhyme. I am not usually one for poems that don't rhyme, but yours was very good and you express your thoughts well. So good job...

Hey do u have a myspace cuz i do, but this poem is really good :)

Sarah
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