Not brilliant!??? i thought this was realy gd! don't put yourself down!!!
well done
lizzie
xx

I'm not sure why, but I didn't like this as much as the others you wrote... For some reason something about it just threw the poem away for me. But it did have a nice format and rhyming. If you tried to doing styles like an Ottava Rima I think you'd do well..Try it.

xDarkSuicidex 4.5

This poem i loved! i loved the ending! like i said you put creativity in ur poems! excellent!

Keep it up!

Thanks for the comment on my poem it means alot to me!