by master of shadow Aug 19, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
The thundering footsteps |
Pff this was so intense. what an excellent writing and yet so sad and so unethical. you are who you are, you can never be perfect to everyone because everyone's perception is different and unique. Though, this of course is completely different. He was your dad. If he beats you up, then he is the one with mental problems, just remember that. 5/5 i think its simply sublime. |
by SashaMirage
That was really such a great poem... though I am very sorry that you had to go through all of that. Your dad is so horrible to have treated you that way. Anyway the flow of the poem was great. And it was very descriptive. |
This was a great poem dont get me wrong but the rhyming didnt see to fit the mood of the poem and maybe it might of been better without the verses. but thats just my oppinion. |
by Mezmeryz
Wow...the poem was soo meaningful, and when it is,i dont think flow and rhyme or anything else really matters...not to me anyway. im soo sorry you have to go through all of this...ther's points where i can relate, but your dad is wrong, no-one has done so much evil to deserve this. the metaphors were great. a beautiful poem. |
by Kylead
SO when are you gonna write your book? |