These are really good lyrics. i'm sure they sound even better than in my head. great write!

I loved it. i think this would make a great song. it' strong and emotional and holds a lot of influencial meaning. wonderful!

Hmm... i liked the rythm!, thought the flow was good, don't think you spelt anything wrong!

Catchy lyrics, what type of music did you have in mind for it? It looks like it could be either a rock song, or a slower one.... Maybe in between, like Evanescence. I dunno, just curious. Good though.

Awesome . I love it .

An awesome song and a great read, but somehow... it seems unfinished, like, not something i'd change but something that just seems... open ended. What the hell am i saying, maybe it's supposed to be that way. Sad and good, 5/5. :)

Awwwh i thought this was really sweet.

The punctuation is kind of distracting, but this was still a nice read. Definitely sounds like lyrics when read, so nice flow for sure.

5/5

Hey this was pretty good! i always love reading lyrics, its always fun to see what the music would be that goes with it...my only suggestion is

I need your help.
Are you near me?
Can you see me?
I need your help.

maybe switching the last two lines.... but then again, if thats how the music to it is, then nevermind!

cyas!
Emmm

These lyrics are really good. you really have a way with words. i really like your poems. amazing. 5/5