Beckoning as the tragedy creeps closer, creating pain, |
The word choice in this is simply AMAZING, and the imagery is so strong! at first i didnt get it because of the format, but then i read how the poem is supposed to be set up and understood. i think that style is very interesting and might try it myself. anyways, this is an outstanding peice with a sad but powerful emotion behind it. |
When I saw the title of this I was wary of reading it... I have a few issues with reading peices on abuse as I often find them very difficult to finish let alone start (but lets not get into that) |
5/5 |
Oh wow...this was terrific...it had great imagery...i could actually see the poor children...it had tons of emotion...a truly wonderful write...5/5. |
Hey good poem! its so sad, |
It's really a brilliant poem. flow was excellent and i love ur use of the cinqtroisdecala rhyme. Really awesome. I think you addressed the issue of child abuse in one of the best ways i have ever seen. |
by Darien
You are really good at creating a depressing atmosphere with your words. It's quite amazing how well you do that. A very sad poem, and it's horrifying all the stories we here of child abuse. This is a really good poem of awareness, and we don't really realize the consequences of abusing a child. Good stuff. |
by J Lau
I'm glad that you included the definition of Lamarca as the poem comes to a different light when we understand it's scheme and how it's suppose to read. Brilliantly done. The imagery was amazing and the choice of words were well though out. Great work! 5/5 |
by LadyPearl
Great job, I love poems that explain the horrors of Child abuse. Nice descriptions and imagery. |
by Jessica
Awhh.. That was soo sad.. Excellently done though.. The flow was good and I liked the style you chose.. The descriptions were great and really showed what children go through.. And the emotion brought a tear to my eyes.. Great job! 5/5 |
Great i think u describe things great keep it up |
by Goran Rahim
Wow, another exellent poem, i liked the flow it went very well. |
by Shelby
I like that one keep it up |
by BrokenMisery
Again a great use of language, its a heart breaking poem and you covered the topic very well! |
Deep and powerful. The slightest bit repetitive, but not unless you read into it, i suppose. I love the 'beckoning' line. Very good! |
by Robie Lincer
This was a good poem, like the style too: yet it was very sad! about the children abuse!!! |
by Sweet lig
Hey some of your poems are great and this poem make me feel so sad this is great for me thanks and may god bless u |
by Megann Lee
Amazing! I was trying to write one of these styles of poems, I failed horribley. This is beautifully done, and horridly sad. Great work. |
Woah!! This is soo sad. But it was great!! 5/5 No questions asked! |