Its really sad.
If you need me to be a friend I'd love to help.
5/5
great write
~emah

Aww...hun...i can relate so much to this...it actually made me cry...if you ever wanna talk message me...i may be able to help...i know where you're coming from =( um...excellent poem...5/5...keep up the good work.

Hey great poem!
really well written!, ur really talented!
well done
love mel

I'll never be alright...
I just pretend to be alright
Do they see me broken in my eyes..
Shattered....
this was a very sad poem and i wish you didn't feel this way and wouldnt hold it all in :( * hugs you *

Do u still hold it in for me?

=( so sad... but.. i know how it feels... even though i supposively have someone to catch me... half the time he just lets me fall...
no one deserves to fall, but it is kind of our choice for holding it in, its just how people are, we hate to show our weaknesses...
anyways, you can email me if you like to talk, take care?

Kind of disjointed and I'm not sure I like the repeated "..."s at the end of every line.

It's got a good message but it really feels like a draft to me. I think you should think on it a bit and perhaps edit it up a bit (typos, spelling, grammar as well) and it'd be fantastic.

Just my two cents.

Really good. i enjoyed reading it and found the emotion really strong. great flow 2 : D keep writing xox

I really loved is poem, so beautifuly written.
great job
5/5

Gabby...another wonderful one! i swear you get better everytime!it was WoW...just loved it! love ya always
~Amber Dawn~