Ooo! I loved it! The flow...the words...almost everything! Lol. I just have a suggestion.

[I've sat and watched the tide
On this sandy, lonely beach
The crashing of these waves
Keeping all things out of reach]

I think the last line should be:

[Keeping all things from reach]

I just thought it might make the flow a little better. =)

Okies...the poem lol. It was heartbreaking! I absolutely adored it! The feelings jumped out to me. I know exactly how you feel, and you're not alone. Although, your rhymes do seem a little easier than they could've been, it was still well written. =) Excellent job! 4.5/5 (I round up for votes) xoxo

Samantha

Awwwhh..... very sweet & sad =) Gave me goosebumps.. very good flow of course, and good imagery. Nice Job , keep up the great works!!!!!

This is an amazing poem i absoulty love it

This is an super awesome poem! my favorite like was when you said "the arrow found it's mark" a definite 5/5 because i can totally relate to this. This gave very good imagery too!!

plz comment any of mine thakns!

go socal!

Emotion and depth stood out in this one. Depth in all of your poems, of course. Talented kid. Good work. 4.5/5

Wow im speachless where did u get this talent ...... who aree u...hahah loved it xoxo Erin

Very creative
good imagery
nice vocabulary
can you do anything wrong?
nice work