Wow another excelent poem by u!! i get sorta shivers from this....a 5/5!!

Sometimes the flow was off. There was also some words that contributed to messing with the flow. Loved the verbs though. The way it was worded gave it a sharper feel in a strange way.
~Faith-less

Wow..I can really tell how you are progressing as a writer...I envy your talent. This was so amazing I absolutely LOVED the word choice, I mean, amazing. I can't decide which is my favorite, this might be it now. This was so beautiful...I mean I really don't know what to say about this one...I loved this. You have so much talent, your such a beautiful poet.
5.5
Breanna

Very different but well written
good job