It's a nice Lanturne. But you have the syllable counts wrong. The first and last line need to have one syllable each, and you have two there. Just thought I'd let you know. :]

Natalie``

Thanks Natalie.
Poem now revised.

Ooo! ^_^ I liked this one. A lot of Lanturnes I've seen are all about nature. I like to see a change in things. =)

I liked this one mainly cuz it was different. I'm sure there was more emotion underneath those words. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

I liked it, words could have been chosen more carefully, they were common and the flow seemed off with these words. but a good poem overal