by Jessica Aug 22, 2006
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
Misty figures slowly float in shadows |
You use the word angrily but then describe them as happy. Such a big contrast with nothing between the too. You may also want to limit words ending in -ly, for some reason they just throw some poems off. The rest of the poem was good though for some of your descriptions. |
by xxbabigrrlxx
Wow ... everything flowed REALLY well and even though it was short it was a really captivating poem that caught my attention...keep up the good work chica!!!!!! |
by Sophie
Good work Jessy! |
Very nicely written.. Very dark and sinister; just the way I Love it. You seem to have gotten downrated on this poem -- it's not a 4.5. Just remember you did very well on this poem. The lowest it should have ever gotten was a 4.9. But good job. |
I liked this poem dark but well written keep it up 5/5 from me |