I loved that...the emotion and flow go well together and u repeating take your last breath put more emphasis on it...great work!!

Omg i love it.. its really sad tho.. i like how u wrote htis... this is how i feel. so yea.. ur an amazing writer.. i can really relate to ur poems and everything. u seem like ur a great person.. someday i wish to meet u. well keep on writing and u can also email me if u ever want to cuz i will reply always..
take care
luve angie

That was beatiful! you are a really good poet.
love .+. unpretty_loser .+. aka jess xo