by Sweet lig Aug 22, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
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by Michelle18
This one was okay... its sounds like you were kinda angery in this one with all of the exclamation points....but i think you should revise it a little..the flow was kinda off at times.. 4/5 on this one |
It was very deep. It sounded as though you were pissed off when writing this. I like it, but it could've been written a little better. But because of the feeling you put into it, it deserves a 5/5 |
Damn, this was such a powerful poem. I felt the anger from this. 5/5 |
by Marc Ortiz
I sense anger in this poem. I like the tone in it. I can see that you really improve in writing.. keep up the good work! |
by Letty
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It really is wonderful. It's filled with so much anger and sadness. You have done a wonderful job with this one. You style is very unique. I just think that you should work on your spelling and that you should focus a little more on the rhythm because it is a bit off. Other then that I say excellent write. 5/5 |