Wow such a well written, powerful and sad poem, you write it well... just some handy hints... on the first line you wrote 'theis'.. i think it is supposed to be 'this' not critique just help :) keep writting..
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Kirsty Palmer xXx

This was a very strong poem of love for someone. I liked it. Just some small critique, I think you're trying too hard to rhyme words, remember, there are many stanzas out there, let your words flow. Otherwise I really did like it. Lovely.