Awe! Kaylee! This was so good. I loved this, seriously. It's so different to most nature poems, and you described everything so well. Your flow was flawless aswell. A great job!! And you are good at writing happy poems, too. =P Tehe. 5/5

Natalie``

I really dislike the ending line... But this was very well worded and nicely written. Forgive me for not being sure of what else to say. Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Such a serene poem. You have a very unique style that is refreshing to read.

This is beautiful, Kaylee! Love the creativity and continual flow, really awesome piece!

This has a very sombre feel to it in my opinion. As if nature is crying and somewhat depressed. I liked the imagery very much, it was well described. Honestly, I think shattered and heartbeats portray a slightly cliche idea, maybe it could me described better.
Thanks for sharing!!

Lovely poem, charming even. I do however have one piece of advice. The words were a bit stilted, the flow, while there seemed interupted.

Very, very interesting.

The only thing I would change is

Father Time wept in salted tears

to

Father Time wept salted tears

the 'in' feels like it's only there for syllable's sake and it's not that flowy with it included.

Very clever writing and ditction.

Bret

Mm. Charming piece! The flow for me was rocky at a few points, but that is just my interpretation. The message and vocabulary was great. Awesome job!