It's Final

by HeavensDevil   Aug 23, 2006


The rain fell down like sheets of ice,
My emotions were changing like a rolling dice.
My cheeks were streaked with wet thick trails,
The tears kept coming without fail.
My face was pale, the blood had left,
My eyes were red from haven't slept.

The dress hung limply, decked in black,
The glimmer and sparkle it seemed to lack.
My hair was heavy and loose it hung,
A sad song my mind had sung.
A veil covered my face from the world to see,
The makeup running despite my pleas.

The marker stood looming up tall,
The words etched as if daring all.
The mound rose, tall with pride,
As if daring any to disoblige.

A single rose lay on top the tomb,
Signifying the pain and the wounds.
The tomb my back did it face,
Trying and failing to maintain grace.

I walked away to never look back,
This was the end, my heart had cracked.

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  • 15 years ago

    by HeavensDevil

    Thanks so much. I'll think it over, see if I can come up with another word.

    I appreciate you taking the time to comment though so thanks =)

  • 15 years ago

    by xXHunnyGurlXx

    I really enjoyed this poem... it had a great story behind it & the ending was partly unexspected.

    The flow was great bar one part.. I dnt no how you'd change it but on the 1st stanza where you rote..
    'eyes are red from havn't slept'

    I think maybe you need a new word in there instead of 'Haven't..

    I dnt no jus my thorts but very well done i loved it.

    Keep it up.
    *Hunny*

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara

    I thought this poem was interesting and well written, but like maybe a suggesttion would be to break up the poem into different stanzas and maybe add a few comas to keep the flow. other than that nice poem, easy and enjoyablke to read with great depth behid every word. ----tara

  • 17 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Wow very creative and dark this is a great poem keep it up

    laura

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