That was probly the sweetest/most adorable things ever.i loved it =]
--lexie

*swoon* One lucky person, whoever you wrote that too. It's great that you're in a band. I myself am a flamenco dancer, but I'm trying to turn my dreams into more than a hobby.
The only correction I can give is a spelling error, "Suppose I never tood the chance," Where I think that took is spelt wrong. But apart from that it was very sweet, like a soft, mellow song on a summer night...

//T.L.//

Wow amazing! 5/5 you deserve no less! the rhyming was great and the flow was smooth, my fav lines are:
Suppose I never became your friend, and gave our lives a start.
Suppose I never thought of you, to heal my broken heart.
great job 5/5

I like what you are doing here but you can improve the flow of this by checking meter.

The flow gets broken up terribly by the moonlight line, for example, and this is easily fixed.

I'm not entirely sure what the friend post line refers to either, but as long as it makes sense to you that's all that matters.

The last stanza is the best (as it should be) and the last line is the strongest (also as it should) which earns you merit.

I think you should read this poem out loud twice to find the areas that stutter the flow and work on them. If you do it will make a good poem a worthy one.

Bret

Dang...david that's good.....I love it...been awhile since I read one from you.

Wow. That is really really sweet. It was so well written I really loved it.

David...David...David...wow I know I've already commented and what not but I just reread it...nice...

I absolutely love this poem.. to whom it was written for.. they are lucky to have read it and known it was about them... i know it seemed a little sad at the end.. but wow it was amazing.. great job! keep up the good work
5/5

Awwwww it was sweet. i was not expecting the ending, though! anyway good job! 5/5