The last stanza's flow to me seemed a little choppy, but who am I to complain? i would never even think of attempting to write a sonnet! The descriptions you use in here are exquisitely beautiful. I hope to read more of your stuff! Keep it up.

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

Your life cloned to a pawn, and she knows the cheats.
((I would rather have heard 'Your life cloned to a pawn, and you know she cheats'.. I know that changes the whole meaning, but for me it would have flowed/fit better..sorry.))

I really liked this.. This poem, like everything you write, is absolutely amazing. It's just..gorgeous. The story you told, the way you told it... It left me breathless! I wish I could write love poems such like you do. Amazing job...I'm sorry to say, but you were downrated on this poem; it's definately a 5.0 poem and nothing less. Great, great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

So beautifully written for a first time writing one. My first sonnet entitled Reflections is posted on mysite check it out sometime. Once again Beautifully Written
Just*some*gurl