Ending it all

by Maddy   Aug 25, 2006


Which one do i pick
To try to end my life
Do i choose the nice new gun
Or the rusty old knife

I picked up the knife
And up my wrist i cut
The blood flowing everywhere
But that was not enough

I grabbed the nice new gun
And shot it at my head
I fell to the ground
And was lying there dead

There i lie
So peaceful i lay
That was until
The devil took me away

He took me to a place
That left much to my desire
Cause when i looked up
I was in Hell - The lake of Fire!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, this was good.. I loved the imagery that your words contained.. Great descriptions and emotion.. You really felt how badly you wanted to feel pain.. There are a few spelling and grammer mistakes that you should fix up though..

    I feel to the ground
    ^ Here it should be "fell" not "feel"

    Nicely done 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by .x.HauNt.x.Me.x.

    That was awesome!
    well written!
    5/5
    keep it up

    xoxoxox

    please comment on my latest poem trapped.. id appreciate it heaps

  • 18 years ago

    by xXxemzxXx

    Sick as poem man

  • 18 years ago

    by ♥-Sharon Ardern-♥

    It's good. a bit too short, tho i reckon. but i gave u a five cos i thought it was good. take care xx

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