It's good. a bit too short, tho i reckon. but i gave u a five cos i thought it was good. take care xx

Sick as poem man

That was awesome!
well written!
5/5
keep it up

xoxoxox

please comment on my latest poem trapped.. id appreciate it heaps

Awh, this was good.. I loved the imagery that your words contained.. Great descriptions and emotion.. You really felt how badly you wanted to feel pain.. There are a few spelling and grammer mistakes that you should fix up though..

I feel to the ground
^ Here it should be "fell" not "feel"

Nicely done 5/5