Message In A Bottle

by amber   Aug 27, 2006


Deep in the golden sand
I find a bottle on land

In the bottle I find a message
A message in a bottle

My beloved my darling how I love
you my lovely gift from above

your sunkissed skin and golden hair
life without you is hard to bear

I want so much to be with you
but I know I can't but I want to

When I close my eyes I see
how our love used to be

why did you have to go
but now i have to let go so

goodbye love goodbye strife
right here and now I end my life

I cried as I finished the message
the blood stained message of my lover long ago

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like anything about this poem. It has too many mistakes. Flow is bad and atmosphere is poor. You could describe emotions a lot better. Wording isn't good and you have many repetition.

  • 17 years ago

    by Adelle

    A good poem I enjoyed it very much.

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This was good I loved it. excellent word choice, and strong emtions. Thanks for the comments

  • 17 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    An awesome message written in a homespun bottle for all to enjoy. my favorite of yours so far.

    your servant:
    david

  • 18 years ago

    by X2892

    Excellent poem loved it 5/5

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