You seem so lonely

by *Wishes do come true*   Aug 27, 2006


You seem so lonely
I want to get close to you

I want to be your one and only
but don't know what to do

you hide your life with smiles and laughs and popularity
but deep down inside i know you have insecurities
I want know your journey and be with you on your path
so lets walk hand in hand and make our memories last

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  • 18 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Nice and cute poem.
    You lack organization with your poem wich kinda makes it a mess.
    Just use your grammar and your capitolization and commas periods, ect.
    Stronger vocabulary spices it up too.
    No critisism just helpful tips.
    5/5 God Bless

    ~*Tay*~

  • 18 years ago

    by Bryan

    Very good poem, it came together perfectly, 5/5!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by jello

    This is short and sweet
    very good
    i love it

  • 18 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Awww this poem i loved soo much! it was filled with love, and it flowed easily!

    keep it up
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awhh, what a sweeeet poem? That was adorable hunny! But again, I think you should break up the last stanza into two lines stanza like you did with the other two.. Lovely words created a beautiful picture! 5/5

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