Comments : My Heroin

  • 18 years ago

    by Laura

    Oh wow this poem was stunning and beautiful. I culd totally relate as I feel this way about my man.

    The flow was flawless and imagery was wicked!!!

    You got my hooked with the second stanza:
    As his fingers lightly sweep my skin,
    My heart hammers my chest to a killer speed.
    Is it so wrong to confess to this addiction?
    Or should I silence words that want to bleed?
    that was deep...but my fav stanza was:

    I'm nothing without him, just a thoughtless mind.
    It's like a well-written poem without a single line.
    He's everything that makes me, the blood in my veins.
    He's the reason for my existence, the key for the chains.

    I exceptionall like that very last line..feelings expressed so sincerely!!
    LOVED IT!

  • 17 years ago

    by Georgi

    Oh babe. the rhyme you used in this is SO PERFECT!! PERFECT PERFECT PERFECT thats all ive been saying!!! just PERFECT!! I love this, the rhyme is actually brilliant and flowed effortlessly. imagery, too, especially,
    "His lips, soft as cotton, but deadly as venom
    His flat-lined pulse embracing my racing heart,"
    that was incredible.