Feel so peaceful while reading this...u hev a great way of expressing urself..keep it up...=)

I liked this one, I read a couple of others and they were disturbing, I wasn't too cracked up about them, all in all though, you're not bad. Keep writing, you'll only improve. =) And thanks for the comment on mine. I'll read some more later on.
-Ally

This makes me feel really peaceful.
from reading your other ones, this is my favourite.
because the all out structure is much better set up.
i think you are good at writing with this kind of structure.
the rhyming wasn't forced and really fit in well.
well written.
(:
kaitlynx.

Short, but really well written. i like the words you have chosen here.

Wow man i really like it. perfect for being so short. flowed real nice too.