Comments : Silent Tears

  • 18 years ago

    by Ruthie

    Hey :) that was pretty deep man. this poem has potential tho... and the style works well for you. i luved the stanzas! awesome *thumbs up*u really portrayed the emotion's from yourself to the poem so yea... keep it up... *hugs*

    Ruthie xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good job. I do have some suggestions for..please don't take them harshly^-^. There's a lot of poem with this kind of topic, but there's a major difference between good and average poems.
    Try not to use "i" too much. Add more imagery to each line so it doesn't sound to plain or cliche.
    Try like:
    Weeping silent placid tears,
    Not wanting anyone else to know,
    How depression swallows me whole
    There is no way they'd understand

    Something along those lines.

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Another great poem, as i can relate to it, that is how i feel sometimes. great job once again. 5/5