Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!

5/5

Awwh, that was good.. The descriptions and detailed words you used really added effect to the poem. I also liked the short lines..

Thing wont be the same
^ Should be "Things" not "Thing" and this line is too long and messes up the flow

Nicely done though 5/5

This was such a good poem, I take back on what i sadi about your other poem this is the best i have read of yours! The flow was a bit rocky! I liked the rhyme and didnt think i seemed forced at all! I especially loved the 1st stanza

"United in love
United in pain
Broken apart
Things wont be the same"

Great Job!! 5/5!!