The Sacrifice Of Love

by Choose xX Alex Xx Life   Aug 29, 2006


Heart, full of sacred pain.
A sacrifice? A fear.
Broken, shattered through kindness of love,
A blistering burning tear.

An opening to a fierce,
Disaster of emotions inside.
Cowering, shivering left alone,
Real world pushed aside.

What? love a word of sadness,
Commitment of tears, eternity?
Rose without petals, empty, old,
Step out of reality

if you have any more ideas for an ending please let me know thnx xxx Alex xxx

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  • 18 years ago

    by N4than

    Ty for the coment =) sory its taken 3 months to get back to u, hanvt been writin at all till just recently, got a couple a newies, rly dif

    i love the flow of the first 2 stanzas, 3rd isnt as gud but awsom poem none the less =D

  • 18 years ago

    by see

    This is good ill keep it up 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Hold Me

    This poem is extreamly cool, n good. keep it up, xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I really loved the ending.
    I liked the entire poem, I thought it was very good.

  • 18 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    Your poetry is getting better and better as I read more. This is my favorite, so far.

    I'm not sure what you could do for an ending, but what you have so far works really well-- the stanzas seem to have a constant format.

    Great work!!! 5/5

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