Fcuking amazing. i love it... doesn't need change.

marry me?
(kidding)

Your writing is amazing.

I love this song. No criticism at all, seriously. A very creative lyric. I can't imagine what kind of music that would go with this, but I guess that's part of the fun and surprise of hearing a new song =)
Keep it up

Great poem....you're a good writer...

You have done a creative job here, i really enjoyed reading it great job 5/5

Finding comfort with a stranger named Jack.
((Eck.. I hated these lines, I'll be honest.))
I carve your name in the bullet, place it on the mantle
Love is a two way street, and i am part of this battle
((However, I LOVED these lines with a burning passion.))

Now, I have mixed feelings about this peice. Had it just been a poem, I would have downrated it to a 4...For it is a 4 -poem-...But the fact that they are lyrics just makes it....I don't know. It just... No, I really don't know. However, the fact that they are lyrics really helped me while reading it. I even had a tune going on..Thus it was excellent.
Sorry if this one was a little harsh..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

The most beautifully tormented song i have EVER read