"Lift all of these weights off my shoulders
and let me feel like I'm on top of the world
Forget all the guilt I've been hiding away
and have my heart finally be at peace"

I really wish it were possible, for someone to come along and take away all my imperfections. But I guess our imperfections make us into the unique people that we are. I really enjoyed reading this poem, it was definetly an emotive write.

Take Care.

"Break the lust that keeps me hostage".

^An emotive piece with a unique flow. The use of imagery is effective, as well as the metaphorical language. I think in this line, however:

"Shake the fear the holds me down" - you should change the second 'the' into 'that'. It doesn't make sense the prior way. But on the whole, a solid piece in it's own way. Well done :).