Its a really interesting idea, original and I liked your link from beginning to the end. Its a great piece, I like your expression, keep it up and dont be discouraged!

Aw.. i like this poem alot... its really cute.. and your a really good writer.. great word choices.. keep it up!

Excellent poem!!!! i love it. i wasnt expecting the ending i just assumed when i started reading it would be about nature but wow. great job. keep it up

I LOVED the words you used. Throughout the poem I was thinking "What is going to come next?" 5/5 Great Poems!
(It wouldn't let me do Crossing The Line Between Pleasure & Pain...It said it had been deleted?..Would you like me to do another one?)

~Shae