Unitited memory

by what happened to friendships   Aug 31, 2006


Why did you have to go.
I wasnt ready for you to go.
I wanted you to be there
when I graduated from high school.
I wanted you to be there
when I got married
Even though your passed on
You will always be in my heart,
I wanted to say I love you
the day you died but
I just could see you
The state that you were in.
I'm sorry I could be
there when you went

I will always remember
the good times we had.
The time the grandchildren
All got to sleep over and
have fun with mom-mom
My sister graduation parties
When you were all smiles.
The time Kristanas born
And you were watching
Kenny and Elaina that day.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Ok. Make you change could into couldn't.
    "I'm sorry I could be
    there when you went"
    Ok number 2 to me, personally, it's a great poem. I'm not usually the type to do this but it's almost like my poems. Kinda rushed. Put a little more info in it. ANyway great job 5/5
    -Vino

  • 18 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Nice poem. It was very sad and meaningful.
    The flow was off..the wording wasn't too good ither. On the second line of the second stanza you put "good time" I think you meant to put "good times" and on the third line of the second stanza it should be "grandchildren" not "grandchild" because on the next line you said "ALL got to sleep over" so that means it's suppose to be plural. Well I just wanted to point those two out.

    Anyway enough of the criticism... I love the simplicity of the poem and how it has such meaning to it and how it captures the reader(me). I liked the first line too, I don't know why but it just got me lured into it. This poem also had a good bit of emotion too. Good job and sorry for the long comment.

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