Nice poem...it flowed very well! and there was SOME rhyme in there but i think you should make it more longer and you wrote "ahve" instead of "have" i think but other then that it was very good! :)
Keep writing
And
Keep Smiling
4/5

Much Love
-*- Tormented

Oh and the mistake of "have" was on the last line :) soory forgot to say that

Take Care
-*-Tormented
xxx

Good good good job yes you still haven't fixed the ahve but still we know what you mean. goog job.