Pretty Eyes Made For Crying.

by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG   Sep 2, 2006


-Pretty Eyes Made For Crying.-

The hour is late and the city is asleep,
All lights are off as time continues to creep.
Dreams coming and going, as the children toss and turn,
Sheets are messed, as their perspirating foreheads burn.

Kicking and screaming in nightmares so surreal,
Being watched from afar by eyes of steel.
He sharpens the blade as he counts the seconds passed,
Panting heavily, as his heart starts to beat fast.

Down the hall, footsteps are inching closer to the door,
As your eyes shoot open from the creaking within the floor.
The moon-cast walls decorated with a shadow of a man,
An arm around the neck, your mouth covered by a hand.

"Don't make a sound, or worse is to come."
An innocent little heart, pounding like a drum.
Carried from her bedroom and down the hall,
Passing the fading memories on the wall.

Thrown to the ground out in an old red barn,
A calloused hand gripped tight around your arm.
A blade at your throat, and tears in your eyes,
Lips start to quiver, as a hand grazes your thigh.

Clothes are ripped and thrown on the ground,
Begging for help with no one around.
Tears stream down her innocent face,
As her rationality is vanished without a trace.

The sleeping city is laced with deceit,
As a mad-mans urges, are filled with replete.
One last look at the crumpled body in blood underlying,
Kisses her to sleep as he says "Eyes so pretty were made for crying."

© Jenna Elphick
September 1, 2006.

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  • 17 years ago

    by GreenxTea

    That's terrible...well, not the writing, but the idea. it's a very good poem...but still, terrible!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    The title was so catching, and the opening stanza really sets the poem off in the right direction, i really did enjoy reading this lovely poem and i am amazed at your ability to right such awesome poems
    xxxxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Brittany

    This was a very good poem and you are a very good poet, 5/5 from me.
    8 ) Brittany

  • 18 years ago

    by xxmichaelxx

    Thankz for participating in my contest!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Ok this was so terrifyingly sad.. it gave me chills, so suspenseful. very well written as well. the only things i could find wrong were a few syllable/line or language issues.(minor tidbits) such as-
    Kicking and screaming in nightmares so surreal,
    Being watched from afar by eyes of **steel. ** to me this part need another word with 1 or 2 syllables. this line is too short.
    ex-Being watched from afar by eyes of *cold*steel.

    He sharpens the blade as he counts the seconds passed,
    Panting heavily, as his heart starts**Begins not starts ** to beat fast.

    Carried from her bedroom and down the *something* hall,
    Passing the fading memories on the *something something* wall.

    Clothes are ripped *off* and thrown on*to* the ground
    Begging for help from *anyone, *but no one *is* around.
    Tears stream down her innocent face,
    Her rationality *no is*vanished without a *single* trace.

    The sleeping city is laced with *lies and* deceit,
    As a mad-mans urges, are filled with replete.
    One last look at the crumpled body in blood underlying,
    Kisses her to sleep *saying* "Eyes so pretty were made for crying."

    these are just my suggestions. do with them what you will. =]

    x.xLauren

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