Wow! its really good! keep them up!!

THis was amazing...when I was reading this I thought of my youth group at church..we're known as Revolution Student Ministries. We talk all the time about how we can start a revolution and man I couldn't agree with you more! This was such a well written piece! I liked how you gave us the example of the farmer, really shows what a true poet you are and that you thought hard when writing this poem and put effort into! Loved it from beginning to end!
Chell

AHHH! YOU'RE SO GOOD!
your rhyming scheme sounds so naturtal and flowing!
Just watch some tiny little edit-ing things.
like, "we children maybe the future" do you mean maybe or may be?
but I think it's amazing!

Great job here as well, 5/5