I liked your choice of words, and the flow was pretty kewl, keep up the awsome work. Plz check out some of my poems thnx
Ch!ild~of~Darkness

Interesting...I havent tried this form,
I think you did really good.
well keep it up!

Keep on writing on what u feel and like

Great one.
another 5/5

Oh. My. Goodness. This is amazing.. I don't know why I love it so much, but I do. Great job! Everything about it was perfect... Every line was flawless!

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

I love the interesting structure of this poem.