Awww... it soo sad.... im sorri for ur loss. |
Awww... it soo sad.... im sorri for ur loss. |
Aww jeffrey aww aww. just awww. |
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Well. I wasn't expecting this. It is OK. Nice emotion.. doesn't have flow though. Depth, not so much. Ehh. nice work? better luck next time, yo. |
OK. Flow: The poem just made me not want to keep reading. It was good at the start.. but the ending result was badly written. Depth: I didn't think you actually knew how it would feel to be like that. Yes, it was good that you saw what is normally there. But how do you think it made her feel? |
by Jess
Jeffness...don't worry sweetie...i love this poem and despite what some people say, it flows like a waterfall....i think she should wake up n see that hers flows like concrete.. |
Really good keep up the good work |
by Jeffrey
A new fan is born everyday. |
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by Jess
Alright babe....so i figured out what it is i like about your poems, you have a way of rhyming without making it noticeable that you are rhyming....so let me put my poem geek glasses on for a sec...i like when poems rhyme, it makes them......nicer to read.....but sometimes it can tend to corny and obvious that the person is trying way to hard to rhyme.....but yours arent like that....they rhyme so easily and it makes it more enjoyable to read....i could have just told you this...but everyone loves comments....alright you are trying to sleep so im gonna stop typing now... |
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY JEFFERSON!!!!!! (pond) hehe |