Wow I really like this poem. The rhyming was great and it flowed very well. The choice of words you used was great also. This poem was so powerful. [5/5]

I liked the whole concept of this poem. But it seems as if it was forced rhymed. It seems like you focused a little too much on the rhyming instead of on the purpose of the poem. Don't get me wrong it was still very good. So I hope that you don't take my critisicim badly, because I too make these same type of mistakes sometimes. So just keep writing and keep up the good work.

Letty