When...

by Kirsty palmer   Sep 4, 2006


When love hurts you know its true,
When love hits deep inside of you
When love tingles your pumping heart,
When love is shown right from the start,

When the one you love holds you in their arms tight
When the one you love helps you through the lonely night
When the one you love always over looks the dreaded cries
When the one you love wipes clean those weeping eyes.

When love hurts you know its true,
When love hits deep inside of you
When love tingles your pumping heart
When love is shown right from the start,

When you love, your worries seem to all just disappear
When you love, your feeling suddenly all become clear
When you love, your soul seems to appear complete
When you love, your head spins faster than your feet.

When love hurts you know its true,
When love hits deep inside of you
When love tingles your pumping heart,
When love is shown right from the start,

When you show your love to your perfect partner match
When you show your love, and prove there is no catch
When you show your love they can give you a chill,
When you show your love your their one and only still.

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  • 18 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    A very cute poem, but a little bit of advice try not to repeat so much into your poem it gets kinda boring((not that it was)) but it does tend to get the reader to not want to finish it because it's predictable. Overall it was a very cute and truthful poem! Well done still a 5/5!

    God Bless,
    Taylor

    --Thank you so much for the comment!
    Much Love♥

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    This one's low rated too! UGH! Lol. I thought this was cute. The flow was good, and I liked the whole 'plot' of it. But I did think that the title was a bit overused in a lot of parts. Ah well. Keep it up. You're getting there. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by Poison Ivy

    Im in love!...thats for the description..very well written!:)

  • 18 years ago

    by Sophie

    Good work kirsty! wonderful poem.
    keep up the good work!

    sophie:) xo

  • 18 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Wow! Another beautiful poem. Great rhyming and it flowed really well. I really loved the repetition. How you kept saying "When" and repeated the first stanza over and over. Wonderful Job.