by darkness Sep 5, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
He's lying alone, eyes in a maze |
I think this sounded like a child's poem. Not to sound rude or anything. I do think young love is cute, don't take this the wrong way, but you could've used different rhymes, add a little more emotion here and there, and possibly you could work on your grammar...It's not all that great. =) 4/5 xoxo |