Comments : Good bye

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    All [though] it [might] be over[,] [I'll] never let you go.
    we had it all and now that[']s going.you left me for another and I'm now died inside.
    [I] hope your happy now that you['ve] killed me.
    even tho part I[']ve me is fighting those part I[']ve me is going.
    and [I'll] never let you down even if [I] could [I'd] give up [everything] for you.
    [I] love you so much [I'd] die for you but it looks as if you don't [want] that.
    [I] gave you my heart and you just spit on it and toast it away.
    its hard to live [without] you.
    i[']ll miss you always and [I] will love you forever.
    i[']ll just have to face the truth.
    that its never to be that you would love me back.
    goodbye I[']ll miss you.

    ^^Up above are all the spelling and grammar mistakes you made. -_- I think spelling and grammar are key in poems. It really threw me off in most places with the grammar mistakes. I've corrected all of them for you in brackets.

    I did like the poems some what. I thought it was more of a story though, had no flow what so ever and I thought if you were going to set it up as a poem, you might have well have put it in the correct format. That's just me. =) 3/5 xxoo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley

    I really liked that one.