Great job. Very original details. I liked the second stanza. very deep

Gr8 poem. had lots of emotions. it was deep. keep writing:)

It kind of confused me? I loved the images that you created in your words. But the flow could use a little bit of work, nto much just one or two lines. It was a great poem overall though. 4/5 =]

-Jenna.

This poem was kind of confusing at
first but as I read on I got the meaning
you used the right kind of words to help the reader use his or her imagination. But I think the flow is
kind of off. I loved it don't get me
wrong. I just think you should patch
things up a little to make it perfect.
I still give you a 5/5 because as I said
its great, but it needs a small touch up

Love
Letty

Wow. I really liked this. I loved the "used-by-date" line it was the best line in the poem. good work, your writing is lovely. 5/5