Wow thats really good

That's really really good. I know how daunting it is to put you're first poems on this site.. i was worried at first too.. But you're really good. Sometimes comments can be harsh, but most of the time they aren't. Critisism is always good because it helps us improve. Keep up the great work hun. I can't wait to read more. =]

I also just wanted to say that this topic is very real and i've never read a poem about this before. Very good job.

That is very good and it's nice that you actually are concerned about that situation...but my only problem with this is the way you question God...that is something you aren't supposed to do..its called faith!

I love this poem...it makes me cry though :( but it's amazing!